“Lackluster Lunch Lines – An American Tragedy” – Week 2 Story Critique

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This week I watched the digital Story “Lackluster Lunch Lines – An American Tragedy.”  It hits upon two important themes in my life: school and health.

What this digital story focuses on is the low quality of food that children are being fed at school.  The author gives a surprising statistic from a study of 1000 sixth graders, saying that students that eat school lunches are 29% more likely to be obese than their classmates that bring their lunch to school.

Overall, this story seemed to reflect the trend that people from lower economic standing are more likely to be plagued by obesity and its many downfalls.

As an assessment of this digital story, I’m choosing to focus on the following traits:

Story – How well did the story work? This trait can address structure, engagement, character transformation or any of the other qualities of story.

  • This story started off with an anecdote about children using the word “yuck” to describe the food they eat at school.  From there it went on to discuss the the quality and effects of this food on our young generation.  From the beginning I found this story to be engaging, as I have a preexisting interest in this topic.  I do feel, however, that to engage other viewers it may be necessary to include an additional element to the beginning of the story.
  • I like that there was information provided to the viewer from a study of sixth graders and how their diet of school lunches can potentially harm them.  I would encourage the author to include more information like this.  For example, she mentions an anonymous teacher blogging about the year she spent eating the same lunches as the students and says that it took a toll on her.  I would like to know the extent of the effects.  It would be easier for people to relate to the story this way and put themselves, or their children in this teacher’s shoes.

Sense of audience – How well did the story respect the needs of the audience?

  • I think the author did well meeting the needs and experiences of the audience.  This digital story is posted to an educational website, and so I predict that the majority of viewers are within the educational field, or have an interest in the field.  As I stated earlier, I believe that the audience could have benefitted from more information from outside sources.

Media application – Was the use of media appropriate, supportive of the story, balanced and well considered?

  • There were many pictures of school lunches included in this story, which absolutely helped the author make the point about their poor quality.  I admit to being shocked at a few of the dishes that are being served to kids.  I liked very much that she included pictures of potential lunches that we could be serving children towards the end of the digital story, and I think there could have been more.

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